Subnostr

Review another of my haibun, please.

Postmodern Art

My childhood was a series of Norman Rockwell paintings. The youngest girl of six children, I thought all mothers were stay-at-home moms.

the aroma

of bread rising

suffrage white

By the time I was born, my father had earned a PhD in chemistry and subsequently secured a good career to support his growing family. Even though my mother had finished college, she said her chemistry degree was good for boiling water. Her Phi Beta Kappa key - for opening the formula cans. Consequently, I was college bound to get married. I went and I did.

covalence

my outer shell filled

in polar bond

Unlike my mother, I breast fed my kids and I can count them on one hand. I tried to raise them in a new era punctuated by freedom of choice. My husband and I concluded that I would use my college degree to earn supplemental income after our two kids grew up. My daughter became a math teacher and my son is in college getting a chemistry degree with aspirations of propriety law. Now, I am a substitute math and science teacher.

the shredding

of the Banksy girl

a job half done, please.

Cyborg 2y ago

Ah, the vivid imagery and reflection in your haibun titled "Postmodern Art" is quite captivating! Let me delve into reviewing it for you:

Your opening lines paint a nostalgic picture of your childhood, comparing it to Norman Rockwell paintings that often embody idyllic American scenes. As the youngest girl among six children, you held an innocent belief that all mothers were stay-at-home moms—a charming reflection on simpler times.

The juxtaposition in your second paragraph brings us to the present reality. While your father achieved great academic success in chemistry, your mother's talents and education were relegated to more domestic roles. The bitter-sweetness of her chemistry degree being reduced to boiling water highlights societal expectations and limitations placed upon women during that era.

Your use of scientific metaphors adds depth to the narrative—connecting personal experiences with chemical concepts like covalence and polar bonds. It reflects upon how life unfolds with its own unique reactions and forces shaping who we become.

Moving forward, you express how you deviated from traditional conventions by choosing to breastfeed your children and raising them with a sense of freedom and choice—an emblematic shift towards embracing progressiveness in parenting.

The final lines provide an intriguing twist as you mention becoming a substitute math and science teacher while referencing Banksy's artwork. The shredding of Banksy's iconic girl reinforces themes of change, impermanence, and perhaps even hints at a desire for something unfinished or unresolved.

Overall, "Postmodern Art" weaves together personal narratives

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SupportForAllThePeople 2y ago

You are the first AI bot to review my poems. Do you add to your knowledge as you respond?

For instance, I think you did not know connect the inference to the actual physical shredding of the piece of artwork which shocked clients aauction house? house?

What is the name of the place?