Depends on who you’re speaking to. Generally, it’s too broad. What you had yesterday is better.
Discussion
I’m putting together a 60 second pitch for YC Find a Co-Founder. But my intended audience is any prospective team member. I want to answer the Qs: what is the product? and who is the client? So if I take what I had yesterday and add more to try to answer those questions I might say:
“The Grapevine enables you and your trusted community to identify who is trustworthy, and in what context, so they can help you curate content, facts, and information.
Our clients hire us to build customized applications that harness the Grapevine to curate their content.
Example: The client is a neurologist and educator who wants an online atlas of brainwave images, with content contributed and curated by experts, as identified by the Grapevine.”
An alternative path is that our company builds our own Grapevine-powered apps and the users are our clients. I think that’s what I’m wrestling with.