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My husband read 34 of 45 chapters of my hobby sci fi manuscript so far, and the funniest conclusion he's had is that it's less autistic than he thought.

He said he knew I would do action and fight scenes well, but for the downtime scenes with friends and partners and stuff he was like, "not that I'm saying I didn't expect you to write them decently, but like, you know... and yet holy shit."

Act 2 really hit him hard. He's currently traveling, so for Act 1 he sent me all sorts of audio recordings of his thoughts and gave some good suggestions, like very interested but kind of intellectual about it. But then for Act 2 instead of sending audio recordings he's was like, "We... need to video chat right now, omg." He ended up reading that second act in one sitting and messing up his schedule because of it.
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N3WD3V 1y ago

Nice Lyn let me add a scene

this will be a classic that writers reading your book will relate to....

The main characters are walking through a techo dystopian bazaar...

late at night around closing time most shops are over but the more ceedy and deprate shop owners just looking for some final customers.

The main character are looking for a shop they have been told to visit but when they visit the location they see a young child sleeping behind a sign that reads "CHILDREN SHOES NEVER USED"

they wake him up to find out that this is indeed the shop you are looking for but the person you looking for was actually a young computer hardware Prodagy but he has recently been kidnapped

his bother is currently selling all his brother belonging to earn money to go find him. Although our main characters cant help him find his brother at this moment

they can pay him generously for the computer supplys they need to complete their own objectives.

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