I’m looking to make a career change and wrote this today…thought maybe I should try to get some unbiased feedback before sending it to potential employers, any suggestions or guidance is much appreciated! 
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Hi Hayley! thank you for sharing this. This is great start. I'd suggest to narrow down your purpose based on the job title you are applying. Eg. What motivates you to apply this job? So it may not sound generic. It is very important to add storytelling and your why. If you want more about this, feel free to dm or hop on a free vid call with me 👌☺️