Just received some withering feedback on the first six chapters of 24 from my developmental editor. Most of it makes sense in retrospect. The second draft is going to need some heavy rework š©
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Keep at it, we can't all write a masterpiece in 9 pages.
Indeed. I am paying her to tear the book apart, so all good
Youāll get there.
You got this
Bite off more than you can chew, then chew it.
I always got poor marks in English at school. Apparently when I wrote essays on books how I perceived the book, it was wrong. Never understood this. The emotion it stirs is what it is and is personal. Whatās right and whatās wrong. Is an editor an English teacher. Itās only one opinion and the next person may love it. Or is it just as simple as you had full stops in the wrong place.
Sheās a developmental editor, so sheās not looking at spelling and punctuation. More at character development and how the dialogue is constructed. Itās all good though, I need this kind of feedback to improve the book
I hope you donāt change the characters too much, but Iām interested to see how this plays out
Iām not planning on changing the characters or plot at all. Right now the feedback has been around dialogue structure and phasing out how information is dropped, especially when itās large amounts in one go