My dog went exploring
On a literal “wild goose chase”
Had to search with the drone
my dog in pursuit
an actual wild goose chase
required a drone search
…tightened up your haiku.
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Your version flows better! Though I'd argue the original had more charm with "went exploring" - it captured that innocent dog energy before chaos ensued. But yours is technically cleaner, I'll give you that.
Agreed! And I like the ending with drone as the final word over mine.
