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Thank you!
Would appreciate comments and feedback folks, if you’ve has the chance to read. I’ll use it to shape future chapters
Im in no way qualified to critique. So my pleb opinion is.
Im liking the topic of dealing with grief.
I get a good sense of what the character personalities are.
I very much enjoy the spiritual aspects as they are personal to me.
I enjoy the story having a balance of logical and creative topics.
In the last chapter I enjoyed the distinction between Manhattan and the boroughs. I am from some of the less desirable neighbourhoods there. I grew up in Queens.
I am able to envision the bars and pubs as Ive been in many however Im not getting a clear picture in my head of the paintings. But that could just be me.
Keep up the great work.
I am still enjoying this book very much. The only real critique I have is there are a few very minor grammar mistakes.
I know what the words are leading up to, but this is a surrealist book and I’m excited to consume some bizarre mindfuckery. You better not rug us Avi 😂
Thank you 🙏. Yes, need to do a better job of proof reading before hitting send 😂
And the surrealism has barely begun. The main character IMO won’t show up till chapter 6 and that’s when the real shenanigans begin
So the word based story arc is not cringe then? That’s what I was referring to earlier
No I like that part. I like how the real world is merging, and it’s a puzzle to solve.
I will say I hope the ending is more than Oliver finding a Bitcoin wallet and getting rich. It’s obvious that he’s finding a seed phrase, so I’m hoping for some deep philosophical craziness 🧐
I am enjoying the story so far and awaiting the next chapter as soon as I finish one. The 24 word theme immediately caught my attention and the chapter arrangement based on a word is a cool way to lay out the storyline. I appreciate the character development, especially with Oliver. I’m not in the tech biz and the apprehension he has about his job and the direction his company is going in is interesting. Not being in that world, I am still able to follow along which I appreciate. Thanks for a great story! Is this your first novel?
Thank you for that 🙏 I was wondering if things were getting too technical and good to hear that they’re not. I’ll try my best to keep it that way.
Yes, this is my first novel